Review Post untuk Tantangan EF #28

Halo semuanya, apa kabar? Nggak terasa sudah hari Jumat lagi, saatnya ber-English Friday lagi. Nah, hari ini adalah saatnya menampilkan hasil review tantangan ke 28, “A Song That…”. (Ngomong-ngomong, sudah pada ikutan tantangan ke 29? Yang belum, ikut yuk.. ūüėÄ ).

Post terpilih kali ini adalah tulisan mbak Zaqia yang bercerita tentang salah satu lagu favorit yang menginspirasinya. Terima kasih kepada mbak Zaqia yang telah bersedia untuk direview, dan untuk mentor kita mbak Mikan, yang sudah meluangkan waktu untuk mereview di sela-sela persiapan melahirkan. Huruf yang dicetak tebal adalah koreksi/saran dari mentor kita. Yuk, kita simak dan belajar bersama! Oya, kalau ada pertanyaan, koreksi, atau yang lain, silakan tuliskan di kolom komentar ya!

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EF #28: “Green Rain By Shinee” a song that makes¬†me happy, spirited,¬†and [tauched]¬†touched.

Everyone loves songs right? Usually we listen to music at [the free time] our free time or break from activity [althought] even though just a minute.

There are many benefits of listening to music such as: to refresh our brain so that to avoid stress, [feel sad and angry] feel sadness and anger, [give] lifting our spirit, getting inspiration, and just for entertainment.

The¬†Weekly Challenge of BEC today is about “a song that ….”

[truelly any song that i like it, so I confused will story about what a song.]Truly, I like any songs, so I am confused what kind of story that I will write about a song. 

After opening my file, I found this video which [inspired for me] inspired me as a teacher, Green Rain By Shinee.

This song is [one soundtrack] one of the soundtracks¬†of Queen’ Classroom Korean Version Movie, before¬†that was [Japanise]¬†Japanese Version. Both of them [very recomended]¬†are very recommended¬†¬†[to watched] to watch,¬†because very [inspirated] inspirational [espesially]¬†especially¬†for education purposes.

This movie [tell] shows¬†about [a uniq teacher caracter] a unique teacher’s character¬†[who killer teacher] who is a killer teacher¬†but have [secreet]¬†secret¬†about his/her¬†last moment as a good teacher.

When [watched] watching the movie, I felt so angry, sad, touched, rightfully proud, and [give applause about the caracter] gave applause for the character.

[Everyone have spesial caracter to move better than last time.] Everyone has a special character to improve on / to work on.

[Why I like song “Green Rain”?]¬†Why do¬†I like the “Green Rain” song?

Because this song tells about [wonderfull] wonderful and happiness of school life and [get science] gaining knowledge. 

[I never bored to repeat watch this video and experience sense of lyric.] I never get bored to keep watching the video and experiencing the sense of the lyrics.

Alright,¬†this is the¬†story about my song… how about yours?

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Oya, ada beberapa pesan dari mbak Mikan untuk kita:

  1. Learn to break your thoughts in simple sentences. Avoid lengthy wording.
  2. ALWAYS capitalize when needed.
  3. Make a habit of proofreading after writing and checking for spelling errors and missing punctuations.

Baiklah, sekian dulu post review tantangan minggu ini. Teman-teman bisa membaca post-post lain dari member untuk tantangan ke 28 ini di link inlinkznya ya. Semoga bermanfaat ya!

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